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Scariest night of my life

This writing sample is about adjective is and adjective that you don't normally use

It was a sunless stormy night my heart was beating as quick as a cheetah. All I can see is a pitch black room. I woke up from a deep sleep CREEK CREEK CREEK goes the wood on the outside of my window. THUD THUD THUD someone's knuckles reaching to my glass front door. I'm so scared and nervous whats happening.

 My temperature is reaching so high to flaming hot. My mum walks into my room meanwhile my dad is calling the police my mum whispered to me "Are you OK Serena?" 

"Yes,I'm fine thank you Mum but what on earth is happening?" Mum replies "There is someone out side our house trying to get in. He is really intoxicated." 

"Mum I'm really nervous, what happens if he breaks in?" 

"He won't. Anyway dads calling the police. "Phew!" as the sweat breaks off my forehead. 

I hear shouting from our house, I peek through the corner of my blind finally a moment of relief it's the police. The policeman shouts at the man "Oi you come here!" The man climbs back over the fence. My mum tip toes outside and unlocks the gate and talks to the policeman for a little bit. 

The man is lying on the footpath with handcuffs on shouting " what did I do I didn't do anything. Oh and did I tell you this a 2:00 in the morning. I think I'm all safe know. I'm back in a deep sleep it a new day and my family is talking about what happened last night. I'm lying on the couch when I hear the exact same knock this time I'm really nervous he is back. Dad is outside I " dad the same guy is here" my mum brothers and I were to scared and nervous to open the door.

My dad's walking over to the door the man talks to dad of how stupid he was last night my dad calls mum she's scared to go. 

Feedback/Feedfoward : I really like your story and your very brave! Next time add some hot words that are not normally used.

Georgia O